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Disappointing Department 19

In Book Review on September 12, 2015 at 4:02 am

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Department 19

Will teen age boys like this? Yes. Will I donate it to my library? Yes. Will I recommend it? Unlikely. Is it good writing? No, most definitely, not.

It seems more like Mr. Hill was trying to write an action film. An action film that went on, and on, and on. It is a string of wild goose chases (and cliches). By page 275, I had figured out who the traitor was, but had to slog through 176 more pages for the reveal. Then, it was a Dr. Evil “blah, blah, blah” style explanation of how he had betrayed them and why repeating everything that the reader already knew.

I’m a bit surprised that it didn’t start with “It was a dark and stormy night…” It did have phases like “blood soaked room” and a three paragraph long description of a helicopter landing. There is a great deal of unnecessary description which I found tedious. Description was often lame. “Standing over Stevenson was a huge grey wolf, as large as a small car.” He seemed to think that the reader needed to know the gender and age of minor vampires at the moment they were staked. “The projectile flew high, tearing off the upper half of the head of a vampire man in his twenties.” How is that relevant information?

During the last 100 pages, I became convinced that Mr. Hill hadn’t read his own writing. During the discovery of the aftermath of the attack on the Russian base, he describes how the blood has soaked through the snow that has fallen since the attack, but the Director stumbles on the first corpse which is covered by snow which has somehow NOT been soaked with the blood of the corpse below it, even though the blood is pooled around the corpse. Which is it?

There was an interesting story hidden in there, but a serious editing would have helped. Unfortunately, it seems that editors at publishing houses don’t actually edit anything. A good story requires interesting ideas, but the execution should result in a pleasant reading experience. This was not pleasant.

However, teenage boys who like monsters, action and shoot-em-up plot lines will love this.